Editing Continued

I have now completed my journey in Kallisor one more time. After several personal edits and beta reads of the manuscript, I turned my work over to three separate editors, in turn.

My first editor, Jill, went to war on the syntax and helped increase the overall flow of the words, adding to that “melt in your mouth” feeling (or maybe eyes, not mouth?).

My second editor, Sarah, was also a beta reader who pointed out a few aspects of the story to tweak and caught some other wording issues.

My third editor, Katherine, polished up a few wording issues that still snuck through but pointed out four major areas where she felt my intent wasn’t coming across. When I looked at it through her lens, I realized she was right, and in one case, it was also what my friend Hayden had said but I hadn’t fixed yet.

Editing those four key issues has been the main focus of my work these past couple of weeks, and now I think I have it. Each issue required a bit of rewriting, and in one case, creating a whole new scene. Each of these pieces of feedback has added to the quality of the story and I really am excited to share it with everyone.

However, I have one more editor lined up now that the bulk of the work is finished. It’s time for the final rinse and shine. Once I send that off, I have a little time to wait. From there, I will make any other corrections needed and then releasing the book to you will be right around the corner. I’m still hoping for October.

One of the most important aspects in all this is the continuity between stories. Red Jade is a four-book series, and even though all four books are finished, I have to release them one at at time right now. I will be working on the other books, tweaking them with all I have learned so far through the editing of book one, Journeys in Kallisor.

Already, I have rewritten the prologue of book two, the Shattered Shards, and made a number of changes to chapter one so that it better fits the closing the first book, considering the changes that I have made. I am sending off book two to Rochelle tomorrow so she can make the first wave of edits.

Thanks, everyone, for all your hard work and support. This has always been a dream of mine and every reader, every suggestion, every edit, and every smile makes it a dream come true.

Lord of the Things

We are halfway into our vacation in Martha’s Vineyard. It is our first visit to the island and we are staying with Kevin’s family. If I let my mind wander, I feel as if there a number of parallels to Lord of the Rings, without the grand evil overlord bent on destruction.
Steve and Kevin

Our party is an interesting one. Kevin and I are the two new hobbits from a smaller island seeing this vaster, more luscious world for the first time. Hilariously, we both started new diets at the dawn of summer and being on vacation has changed the flow, which is half the fun of vacation. So it’s not quite second breakfast or elevenses we’re looking for, but our eating pattern has changed. With each new location we visit, our eyes open with wonder and merriment, and we bravely seek what awaits around each bend.

Kevin’s brother, our host, John, plays the role of Gandalf. He met us at the airport and introduced us to the island and our “quest” — then work called him away with other matters from the wizarding world, and he will return this evening. True to form of a great and powerful wizard, we don’t precisely know when his arrival will occur. I wonder if he will be wearing a fresh white robe. Always a mystery.

Our hostess, Christie, is Queen Galadriel, elegant and wise, ever-helpful and friendly. She ensures all of our needs are taken care of and at dinner last night, she made sure we sampled delicious Lembas — er, garlic — bread. It was delicious and sustaining! She has provided all the transport for our adventures and has been an informative and delightful guide to all our destinations.

Next is the elven princess, Courtney, whose laughter echoes like a breeze through the glorious trees. She weaves wondrous tales of friends and places, engaging us all in smiling joy. Especially talented, every yard of fabric she touches glistens with magic and flutters in the island breeze, adding to the color and fragrant wonder of this magical land.

The final member of our Fellowship is the burly dwarf, Matthew, whose prime focus is battle strategy. His face glows with the LCD Light of Doom as he unleashes special attacks upon our foes and makes the world around us safe from orc and goblin alike. Though his focused methods may separate him from the group at times, he is certainly aware of his surroundings and strategizes accordingly. Take care when trying to capture his likeness on fairy-film, however, for dwarven blood does not take well to magic, and often his image appears distorted.

The quest is underway and we are thoroughly enjoying the different routines, sights, sounds, and flavors. We are curious to see much Moria of this island, and I hope you don’t “mine” my indulgence here. Onward!

Prologue Peek

This bit is just for you. It’s a brief peek at part of the prologue of Red Jade: Book 1: Journeys in Kallisor. Twenty years ago, the kingdoms were at war once again. An ill-fated group determined to turn the tide. Enjoy.


  “Vetrimon, get moving. If we don’t get this done now, we’re lost.” The rogue pulled a dark shroud over her head, neatly concealing herself in the dark night.
  “King Kannilon will have our heads for this,” the man complained.
  Another from the group of five piped in. “This war’s been going on long enough. If we’re successful here, then we may be able to turn the tide. His Majesty would thank us.”
  “Besides,” Freth noted grimly, her voice barely heard, “we’re not likely to make it back anyway.”
  “Thanks for the reminder.” Vetrimon groaned. Then, a moment later, he shuddered. “What if we encounter any mages?”
  Freth spat on the ground. “Curse those nature-mangling fools. That’s the whole reason we’re here, to stop them from destroying the natural order of things.”
  A white-haired thief jabbed Vetrimon in the arm. “If you’re not with us on this venture, then stay behind here and be lost on the field tomorrow. I’ve heard enough complaints. Freth, are we doing this?”
  The five rogues reached their hands together and whispered tightly, “For Kallisor!” Each took a pouch from Freth and tucked it away. They shared a last solemn look of commitment and darted off into the night.